In my last post, I spoke about the very poor slides from a recent presentation by by Barack Obama. – the so-called "Yes we Can" speech. Firstly an apology- the slides were not created by Obama, but were created by a blogger to demonstrate how poor slides can ruin a presentation. Sorry for the miscommunication.
However, they are a great example of poor slides, so I have dissected them and shown what could have been done.
The main problems with the slides is that there is far too much text, and there is such missed opportunity for great visuals (I have left the original slides in the bottom left for reference).
I removed the agenda and second hope slide – they were redundant.
Yes we can! – simple and patriotic
Thank you – personally I don’t think that you need this slide, but if you have to have it, show visual of what/who you are thanking (I just stuck the picture of the family in to illustrate).
Time for change – representing the diverse culture of American people.
Change isn’t easy – difficult to break out of the mold – Lego people.
What we’re up against – a brick wall.
What I see – the title does not interest me. Obama is actually speaking about what he sees in his country, so I have renamed it to My country. The picture is a vivid picture of inner-city buildings with fences and graffiti.
We cannot loose hope – picture of patriotic child representing hope for the future.
What I know – also boring title. Obama is speaking about we can achieve, so I called it We can. I am not too sure about the picture of the children, perhaps a bit too cuddly. It also makes a good climatic transition into the last slide, which is…
Yes We can – some stars and strips.
Which slide deck do you prefer?
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